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I haven't commented on your videos before, but really wanted to just leave a few quick notes 
- Your action animation is looking much smoother than I've ever seen before and it seems more polished and natural. There's one shot in particular of one of the pilots that seems to swoop around his head that especially seems very complicated and I think is executed well even in this WIP version. Really liking the the way this is looking so far.
- I'm not remotely an artist, but these are just a few tweaks/notes that stood out to me:
+ For the female character, I would suggest making the pink of her lips a more neutral color and less thick around the mouth. I like the distinction that helps set her apart as more feminine than the other pilots, but I think if she is a pilot, she wouldn't have something quite as bright. I also think if the line with a little thinner, it would be a bit more subtle and natural.
+ Also on the female character towards the beginning (though I noticed this in one of the earlier episodes too), when her hair is blowing in the wind, I would recommend maybe extending the loop of the hair movement a little bit longer (I'm assuming that's how you do it anyway) just so it looks a little less predictable and fluid. That might just be a temporary thing for this WIP too, so ignore this if that's the case.
+ I was a bit confused - again this could be totally WIP related and will be animated more in further versions of this - during the first shot/sequence of the frames fighting when they would lock, exactly what was happening since I couldn't make out any weapons. I'm definitely guessing that this will probably be clearer in future iterations, but right now that still looks a bit undefined to me exactly what's going on.
Dialogue sounded pretty good overall, though I would recommend a bit more noise removal along the road if that's not already part of the plan. The only line that stood out to be as a bit forced was the "light gleaming in your eyes" bit from the general - I think the way it was written sounded forced and it didn't come across as natural to me. Otherwise the more dramatic dialogue sounded very appropriately intense and committed.
Very much looking forward to seeing more of this - I'm already impressed
- Your action animation is looking much smoother than I've ever seen before and it seems more polished and natural. There's one shot in particular of one of the pilots that seems to swoop around his head that especially seems very complicated and I think is executed well even in this WIP version. Really liking the the way this is looking so far.
- I'm not remotely an artist, but these are just a few tweaks/notes that stood out to me:
+ For the female character, I would suggest making the pink of her lips a more neutral color and less thick around the mouth. I like the distinction that helps set her apart as more feminine than the other pilots, but I think if she is a pilot, she wouldn't have something quite as bright. I also think if the line with a little thinner, it would be a bit more subtle and natural.
+ Also on the female character towards the beginning (though I noticed this in one of the earlier episodes too), when her hair is blowing in the wind, I would recommend maybe extending the loop of the hair movement a little bit longer (I'm assuming that's how you do it anyway) just so it looks a little less predictable and fluid. That might just be a temporary thing for this WIP too, so ignore this if that's the case.
+ I was a bit confused - again this could be totally WIP related and will be animated more in further versions of this - during the first shot/sequence of the frames fighting when they would lock, exactly what was happening since I couldn't make out any weapons. I'm definitely guessing that this will probably be clearer in future iterations, but right now that still looks a bit undefined to me exactly what's going on.
Dialogue sounded pretty good overall, though I would recommend a bit more noise removal along the road if that's not already part of the plan. The only line that stood out to be as a bit forced was the "light gleaming in your eyes" bit from the general - I think the way it was written sounded forced and it didn't come across as natural to me. Otherwise the more dramatic dialogue sounded very appropriately intense and committed.
Very much looking forward to seeing more of this - I'm already impressed